Vielen Dank 
Du hast mir sehr geholfen.. die Note entscheidet ob ich vll noch eine bisschen bessere Note in Englisch bekomme oder nicht...Was meinst du, ist der Text gut? Auch wenn du ihn inhaltlich nicht so gut bewerten kannst, was hälst du sprachlich von ihm?
Mit "burst into flames" wollte ich einfach nur sagen, dass er alles nicht mehr aushält, eben bald explodieren wird, du siehst, dein Wort passt besser;-)
Lg Sterniii
also denke ich mal:-)
aktiv
im simple past-->deshalb killED
Hallo, ich muss im Englischunterricht einen Inneren Monolog einer bestimmten Person, aus einem Film, den wir gesehen haben, verfassen und bekomme ihn benotet. Bitte helft mir damit ich ihn am Monatg möglichst fehlerfrei abgeben kann. Wenn ihr Vorschläge für bessere Formulierungen habt, speziell bei dem einen langen Satz in der Mitte, nur her damit 
Liebe Grüße Sterniii
Hier der Text:
Tariq's Inner Monologue After Kitchen Scene
Oh I can’t believe it. He is so very stubborn. The only important thing in his life is this silly Pakistani tradition. Pakistani tradition and nothing else matters:
“Don’t eat bacon, don’t drink alcohol, don’t go to discos at night, learn to speak Urdu, have no British friends only Pakistani ones, do not live a British way of life, love your Pakistani religion and not to forget, the most important thing:
Do always the things I want you to do because I AM YOUR DAD and good Pakistani sons do what their fathers say to them because only the fathers know what’s best for them. Because the sons can’t think themselves. And the mothers can’t. And the daughters can’t think themselves too.
Nobody can think.
I’m the only person who is able to think.
So you can be very lucky that you’ve got such a great Pakistani dad like me, who can make a really good Pakistani boy out of you.
And the next thing I want you to do is to marry this wonderful, beautiful, very bright and intelligent, funny and desirable Pakistani woman.
Ok forget these wonderful, beautiful and intelligent things…but she’s Pakistani and that is what’s important. Nothing else. Just Pakistani tradition.
With her you can keep up our Pakistani tradition and you can practise our Pakistani religion and you would not forget our nice Pakistani customs. Then you aren’t allowed to drink beer, eat bacon or have fun further on.
Doesn’t it sound great?”
Pakistani religion, Pakistani tradition, Pakistani customs, Pakistani people, Pakistani ceremonies…Pakistani, Pakistani, Pakistani, Pakistani!!!
ARGH... I DON’T WANT TO LISTEN! I CAN’T HEAR IT ANYMORE!
I have to burst into flames if I just have to think of any Pakistani shit in my whole life again!
I just can’t believe it! My whole life is like a devil mass just because of his fragment of the mind and he takes no interest in it at all!
Oh no… I think my life WAS long enough like that. It’s time do change. Now he wants me to marry a woman he had chosen even without asking me! He wants me to marry and be happy with that... that... NO! That is too much! I’ve got enough from him and his trash. I don’t want to be punished anymore for his own failure. Only because he had failured in keeping up the Pakistani tradition by getting divorced from his chosen Pakistani woman and marrying our mom, a British woman, to get easier visa for England to gain a better standard of living, he can’t force us to fulfil his dream of a real traditional way of life. Because this is HIS dream and not ours.
He has to understand that it is over and that we are not Pakistani. That our roots are half British and not completely Pakistani. That we are born in England and not in Pakistan and that we are consequently more English than Pakistani.
The only Pakistani thing in our life is he!
He, my dad, the most stubborn, least lovely and most intolerant person I know.
He, the one who causes every serious conflict in our family and the one who beats his wife and his children for things they are not to blame for… such a person wants to know what’s best for me and what it is that makes me happy?
He has no idea what it means to be happy or how to make other people happy because he only knows the Pakistani tradition
Nur noch eins..^^
Heißt das dann: "...i also give coaching in school stuff"? Also mit dem Verb "give" oder muss man da ein anderes benutzen und muss man das noch ergänzen,um zu sagen, dass es sich zum beispiel nicht um Fußballtraining handelt, sondern um Nachhilfe und wenn ja, heißt es dann "in" oder "at" oder was?:-)
Cool, danke! Du hast mir echt sehr geholfen:-)
Lg Sterniii
Hey, danke schonmal! Sonst findest du den Text gut?
Ich wusste nicht was Nachhilfeunterricht ist, weißt du es vielleicht? "repetitional lessons" hat der Übersetzer von Abacho ausgespuckt..
LG Sterniii
Hallo,
ich möchte mich gern als Aupair-Mädchen bewerben.
Die drei folgenden Texte sind an die möglichen Familien, bei denen ich leben werde, gerichtet und ich möchte gern, um einen möglichst guten Eindruck zu vermitteln, dass sie fehlerfrei sind und einen guten Stil haben.
Ich habe schon mein Bestes versucht, aber bin mir immer noch sehr unsicher in der Ausführung.
Es wäre sehr lieb, wenn sich jemand, der von Englisch Ahnung hat, den Text mal durchlesen bzw. überarbeiten könnte. Über Verbesserungsvorschläge wäre ich auch froh.
Danke schonmal im Vorraus Smile !
Dear Family,
I'm really looking forward to the time we are going to spend together and I'm sure it will be a very great time for all of us.
For the kids I will be a new friend with whom they can have a lot of fun.
For the parents I will be a reliant assistant in the household, in keeping care of the kids and helping them with the schoolwork or other daily problems.
And if you have pets like a little dog, it would be nice for me to go for a walk with it.
Finally I can only say that I cannot wait to gain the experiences of living in a foreign country and to be part of your family for the next few months.
Lots of regards,
Sterniii
***, bitte erzähle uns von Dir und Deinen Interessen
My name is *** and I'm ** years old (in April 2010 I'll be **), my hobbies are swimming, jogging, skiing, dancing, reading, cooking, creative arts and having fun with friends or with my family.
I also like kids; playing games with them, doing any sport activities or teaching them.
Here at home I did a practical course at a primary school two years ago and we really had a lot of fun together. Sometimes I take care of kids from the neighbourhood, too. I also give regularly repetitional lessons with success.
I think I'm a nice, friendly and reliable, self-confident but quiet person, who likes action.
I've got a little brother - ** - who is ** years old. We and our parents - **&** - live in a little and quiet town in **.
I'm going to finish school next year in April and before I go to university to study biology and maths to become a teacher, I would like to spend a few months with a nice and friendly family in an exciting country.
**, warum möchtest Du als Au Pair arbeiten?
I like spending time with kids and travelling, discovering foreign countries, and customs very much and I also want to improve my english a little bit, so I think it would be great to be an au-pair-girl =)
