Often you can characterize a person outward an internal. Ich bin mir an dieser Stelle nicht sicher, was sie bedeuten soll, jedoch habe ich das noch nie gehört.
And this is what we want to do now . But first we need some information which we can look on. (welche wir betrachten können) Please open your books at page 18 and have a look at line 20. Is there anybody who wants to read out? Im Englischen sagt man nicht "to read it" wenn es um das vorlesen geht. Dies sagt man nur, wenn es um das lesen individuell für dich geht. Gebräuchlicher ist "to read out"
Only until(Im deutschen sagt man bis oder zu, aber das wird nicht mit "to", sondern until übersetzt) line 29. Okay thank you for reading. Now we need someone who comes to the blackboard and make a small chart. With the two subdivisions(Unterteilungen) we spoke some minutes ago about. (einen aufrufen) Who has any ideas what we could write in the chart? (Tabelle mit den Schülern ausfüllen) Okay now we habe many outward things and I have to say, that there was not many internal things written but maybe you know some character things Grob übersetzt Chrakterdinge, keine Ahnung, was du meinst, aber "chracter things" ist kein mit bekannten Wort on your own since anyone of you read (gesprochen: red) the book. Thank you I think this are mostly the same things as I found Kein "out" hier, weil du sie nur gefunden hast, was ich finde besser klingt und passt.. Now I want to explain you my opinion of Jack.
From my point of view Jack is a person who represents evil and violence in the book.
He seems to be a normal boy with red hair, frackels(?) and a black cap. But his personality (passt besser als "character", weil character zwar im Deutschen verwendet wird, aber im englischen mehr für die Beschreibung von anderen Personen verwendet wird.)
shows the (Davor stand "a kind of the dark site", ich weiß nicht, was das bedeuten soll, glaube aber nicht, dass das richtig ist. Hoffe das ist so auch noch richtig im Kontext.) dark site of the human nature. From the beginning on (so heißt es, vom Anfang an) of the book Jack has a lot of control and self-esteem issues, he speaks his mind --- Was soll das bedeuten? and becomes violent if he does not get his way. Wenn du sagen willst, "er bekommt seinen Willen nicht", musst du "wishes" verwenden, dabei bin ich mir aber nicht sicher. Kannst auch einfach schreiben "if he does not get what he wants.
Jack goes after Piggy from the beginning on because Piggy is weak and so he shows to the other boys, who the leader is. He continually challenges Ralph`s authority, drawing attention to himself as often as possible. Jack quickly realizes that, with no adults on the island, he can drop his few "civilized" traits he has and become the sociopath that he was always meant to be. In the end of the novel Jack`s dream became true. He set himself up as sort of a king, "Jack, painted and garlanded, sat there like an idol...."(page....) But his ruthlessly manner(rücksichtlose Art) when he pursues Ralph he blocks himself, because of a momentous(folgenschwerer) mistake to which only happened because of his Greed for authority.(Gier nach Macht)
Jacks position in the book /used to being a leader
Imagine you are on this island as the character „jack“. What would you do to become the leader of the whole group. Who of you would rob the thinks of the week boys or kill some boys to be the leader? And who of you would be friendly and help the people and would try with this traits to become the leader? …..Now you can see that everyone of you would choose the friendly way but Jack chose the brutal way and how he still became the leader I will it explain now. Jack is the leader of the elite school group, but from the beginning he acts as a leader for the whole group. In contrast to Ralph, jack tries to get the attention from the others by hunting, having fun and the power which jack has because of his brutal character. But quickly the others realize this. (Jacks group only hunts and has fun). This attracts almost all the others that have not joined the hunting tribe yet, leaving only a few to manage survivals on Ralph`s side. As more boys enter the tribe, Jack`s power seems to increase. Whatever belief enters Jacks mind, the others will follow and obey with no question. He is the only boy on the island who does not follow Piggys ideas which once formed democracy throughout the novel, have now turned to dirt. This gives them the illusion that Jack is never wrong and can handle the role on being a "sole-leader". Then Jack`s tribe kills Piggy an he "brainwashes" the others into believing that Ralph`s group is boring and wrong. This is what sets all the others out to kill Ralph at the end. And thats how Jack has reached his goal, being the leader of the boys on the island.
But in my opinion, Ralph`s society would have been better if he takes the route „as democracy is governed by the people, for the people, and with the people.“
Eine ganze Menge, aber wenn du das ohne großes stottern rüberbringst, wird das echt gut 
Wenn du noch Fragen zu den Korrekturen hast beantworte ich die gerne.
Darf ich noch fragen, welche Klasse du bist?
MfG
Robert
