Wow... also der Text ist schon nicht ohne und auch verständlich. Er ist aber nicht super. Du solltest damit anfangen was eine "abortion" ist. Dann sagen furthermore i will discuss the pro and contr of an abortion. Danach kommt die Auflistung mit first, second, third, sowie on the one side, on the other side. Also z.B. First the abortion is a big step in a womans life. There is no possibility of an abortion without a consultation with the doctor. There are also many problems which can rbe a resul of an abortion. For example if the girl was to young, there is a big possibility that she would never get pregnant. Also trenne immer die Sachen und versuche Beispiele zu geben. Und auch den letzen Satz solltest du umformulieren: In my opinion an abortion can be the right decision, if the young woman can't get the child, because of... The young woman will be alway resposible of killing a human being, what is conected to the feeling of missing, frustration and depression.