Beiträge von Lilly's magic feather

  • Bitte anschauen! Vielen Dank

    Especially, don’t fall victim to the enjoyment that you’ve had shopping. --------besser: Most importantly, don't become a victim of bad shopping habits. Oder: Be aware of not falling into the trap of the short-lived excitement when shopping for stuff.


    and end up having bills not being paid ----- besser: and end up having bills you cannot pay.

  • Vokabelfrage

    Ein Schuljahr dauert 1 Jahr. = A school year lasts for 1 year.

    last / lasts for = dauern / dauert (Verb)

    Das Schuljahr beginnt Mitte August und dauert bis Anfang Juli des nächsten Jahres.
    The school year starts mid-August and lasts until early July the following year.

    oder man könnte es auch mit einem Nomen umschreiben: The duration of a school year is 1 year. Die Dauer eines Schuljahres beträgt 1 Jahr.

  • Bitte anschauen! bitten den Text zu überprüfen ob er gut strukturiert ist

    Ich habe jetzt nur ein paar Ausdrucksfehler und Grammatikfehler korrigiert, die mir gleich aufgefallen sind..
    zur Textaufbau würde ich sagen, dass du zu viel über das On-line shopping schreibst (die Vor-und Nachteile), aber dich nicht zu sehr über das "Conventional Shopping" äußerst.
    Ich hätte jetzt ganz klar die Vor-und Nachteile von beiden "shopping"-Arten aufgezählt und dann eine Schlussfolgerung gezogen.


    Aber alles in allem, wenn du wirklich diesen Text alleine zusammengefasst hast, hast du dir viel Mühe gegeben..also..gut gemacht!

  • Bitte anschauen! bitten den Text zu überprüfen ob er gut strukturiert ist

    Online shopping versus Conventional shopping

    In today’s rather strained economy, most people are trying to save money wherever possible. Consequently, people are now searching for the great bargain. The trick is knowing when and where to purchase. Moreover, in order to get your best deals, you will need to know where you can make a comparison.
    Internet is a platform where you easily accomplish comparison. If you want to save even more, you can sign up for the store’s mailing list, and use any coupons they may send you. Whereas in earlier times by shopping meant getting ready, going out to the local mall, trampling the high streets, facing the terrible crowds and going through a million aisles looking aimlessly for that one product these days internet shopping can be done from the comfort of your own home with just one click.

    Online shopping is a convenient way of shopping, which many people enjoy the benefits it provides. It is an easy way to shop around and can be a great time saver. If you are interested in reading product reviews, getting the latest fashion updates, then the internet is an efficient podium. You can even discuss on the site about your impending purchase and get feedback from others whether the product is worth to buy or not. The Internet offers a wide choice to buyers as well as the different tastes and different attractive offers. In addition, the products come to you direct from the manufacturer or seller without middlemen involved which not only leads you to get cheap deals and better prices but also getting discounts that are given by the company. Furthermore, you can have advantage of buying things online that can’t be found in your area or the goods you find can be more expensive. Because of the internet you can purchase anywhere in the world and search endlessly for the best price for an item. And perhaps best of all, you don’t have to put up with poor customer service, queuing or jostling in stores and you can shop in your own time, not the stores’ shopping hours. And also the best part about shopping online is the fact that you get the things you want delivered right to your house. If it's big, you don't have to worry about shoving in the trunk and hoping that it won't fall onto the road. True, you have to pay a shipping fee, but that's just a minimal charge.

    On the other side most people are reluctant to internet shopping because of several fears and uncertainties. These fears and uncertainties include the inability to feel or try on clothes or the ease of use before buying it. Furthermore, the benefits from the immediacy of collecting the item at time of purchase which are the core benefits of buying in-store will be prevented due to internet shopping. An argument also could be made that shoppers have more fun by going to the mall with their friends, trying on clothes, testing products and getting opinions. To a large extent buying on internet you are basing a decision on a picture of the article and the information the website provides. There are also “bidding for products” websites, such as Ebay, where you can find items being sold by individuals where you aren’t guaranteed whether a description of a product is right or not. A dangerous thing about internet is the fact that there are also a number of reasons that people can be put off from internet shopping because of identity theft, transaction security, and privacy. The greatest pain of online shopping could be also the shipping process and its related shipping price and aggravating return policy through online shopping. It can be daunting to wait for five to seven business days. And even if you pay additional charges to have the product being shipped via an "express shipping", it doesn’t necessarily guarantee that the item will arrive when it says it will. Worst of all it can be if you get an article which you didn’t order at the first place; this will mean sending the product back for a replacement of returning.

    All in all, I would say apart from these problems online shopping could be safer and more enjoyable if you follow a few precautions. For example, if you buy items from Ebay, make sure that the private seller has plenty of good feedbacks. Nowadays, the inability to feel the product or try on clothes is somewhat depleted with a tool called “My Virtual Model Inc”, which virtually allows online shoppers to try on clothes prior to purchase. Consumers can reduce the risk of identity theft and transaction insecurity by simply buying products from trusted retailers. The reputable companies also use encrypted systems that are designed to keep your data safe. The only thing I would not consider buying online is grocery products because of the short dated and reduced fresh food items.

  • kurze Biografie über Nelson Mandela - so richtig?

    Nelson Rolihlahla Mandela was born in Mvezo in South Africa on 18 July, 1918. He worked as a lawyer after he had studied law. He has been one of the most influential human rights activists.
    For his decade-long fight against Apartheid, which he was imprisoned for as a political prisoner for 27 years. He is admired by people all over the world. Because of his staying power and fighting spirit, he provoked political changes in South Africa. With his determination he motivated the people also to protest and stand up for their rights, so that the oppression of the black people in South Africa came to an end. From 1994 until 1999 he was elected as the first democratical State President of South Africa and admired as an idol. His actions were honoured in 1993 with the Nobel Peace Prize.

  • Korrektur?

    Nelson Rolihlahla Mandela was born in Mvezo in South Africa on 18th July 1918. He worked as a lawyer after he had studied law. He has been one of the most influential human rights activists.
    His decade-long fight against "Apartheid" caused the imprisonment for 27 years. He is now admired by people all over the world. Because of his influence and fighting spirit he eventually provoked political changes in South Africa. With his determination he motivated the people also to protest and stand up for their rights, so that the oppression of the black people in South Africa came to an end. From 1994 until 1999 he was accepted as the first democratically elected State President of South Africa and admired as an idol. His actions were honoured in 1993 with the Nobel Peace Prize.