Ich bitte um Korrektur eines kleinen essays

  • Hallo

    Ich musste fuer meine Schule einen kleinen Aufsatz schreiben.Für Tipps und Anregungen wäre ich sehr dankbar.


    The worst party I have ever been through


    I was at a the party this year.The location was pretty and there were a lot of people which I didnt know.After I had some beer I met a girl in the house who told me she is already 18 years old.She was very nice and lovely.We started talking .After a little while we decided to dance ,shared more alcohol together.Lets say we had a lot of fun.Some hours later we decided to go outside the house and get some fresh air.Suddenly we heard the police alarm at the house.We didn't do anything wrong .The police officer came to us and asked for our passport.I showed them my passport easily .Then they said I can stay at the people.Then they asked the girl for the passport which she showed up to them but they saw she is not allowed to stay here because she is not full-aged.I said oh no why did you ly to me ?
    She didnt answer anymore.The officers took her into the car to send her to her parents.After that I have never met her again.What a pity.

    Ich danke im voraus

    Dave