Hatchet summary

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Brian Robeson, a thirteen-year-old boy flow_1,2 to his father, his parents are divorced. But his pilot became_1,2 a heart attack and died₂, so Brian is alone on the plane. He can land on a little lake. The only thigh₁ he has is a hatched₃ that gave him his mom_2,4 before starting and the secret that his mother has an affair. He began immediately_2,4 to build a shelter and made fire_2,5. He ate₂ strange berries that make him sick. But from time-to-time₁ he learns to hunt fishes and other little animals like rabbits. Also he learned₂ to clean the animals to eat them. One day a flow_1,2,5 over and doesn’t see him. Slowly he lost₂ his self-confidence and tries to suicide him₁ with his hatchet. But he realize₆ that is₅ meaningless and its₁ better to search for a way out. One day a tornado brings the wreck on₁ the surface of the lake and Brian remind₆ that there was a
rescue-kit inside the plane. So he saved2 the kit but he saw₂ the dead pilot under water that make₁ him sick. The₅ next day Brian opens the survival-kit an₃ in this moment appears a airplane_4,6 that rescued₂ him after 54 days.

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2 - falsche Zeit
3 - Rechtschreibfehler
4 - falsche Satzstellung
5 - fehlende Wörter
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