Gutes Thema für Englisch Referat und Anschließende Textkorrektur!

watercooled

Hallo Leute

Folgendes, wir müssen aktuell in der 9. Klasse eine kurze, etwa 5 Minütige Englischpräsentation halten.
Dabei dürfen wir alles benutzen was uns so einfällt und das Thema vorstellen was uns interessiert.
Jetzt hat sich durch ein paar blöde Zufälle mein Termin verschoben, so dass ich mein Skript schon am Freitag abgeben muss. Das muss nur so eine Art grobe Gliederung mit Text sein, die Präsentation ist erst nach den Ferien, dH. ich habe noch genug Zeit um den Rest zu machen und um alles nochmal zu überarbeiten.

Mein Problem ist nur das ich nicht wie jeder X Beliebige Schüler ein Thema machen will (Las Vegas, San Francisco) bei dem der Lehrer sich schon denkt: "Nicht schon wieder!" Abetr alle Temen die mir so eingefallen sind, sind irgendwie zu Nerdig, oder man findet zu wenig Infos darüber, oder es ist über meinem Englisch Niveau, und und und. Jetzt meine Frage an euch: KENNT IHR EIN GUTES THEMA?

Wie Gesagt: maximal 5-7 Minuten lang, man sollte Bilder zeigen können und nicht zu viele neue Wörter und Begriffe die man in der 9. Klasse nicht kenne kann!

Danke schonmal

mfg

tiorthan

Was waren das denn für Themen, die zu "nerdig" sind? Du sollst ja über ein Thema referieren, dass dich interessiert. Vielleicht lässt sich ja ein Weg finden um die Themen interessant zu präsentieren oder es gibt ein alltagstaugliches Nebengebiet, oder was auch immer.

Unregistriert

Naja ich bin ein ziemlicher PC Freak... Sollte also nichts in die Richtung sein....

tiorthan

Wie wäre es denn mit "The platypus". Sehr viele haben es schon einmal gesehen, aber fast niemand kennt sich damit aus.

DonMedia

Schreib doch etwas über "The American Dream" und "The Pursuit of Happiness" (Das Streben nach Glück). Letzteres stand immerhin in der amerikanischen Unabhängigkeitserklärung.
Ein anderes gutes und ergiebiges Thema wäre "High School", oder schreib etwas über die großen Autokonzerne Amerikas (Ford und Chevrolet).
Frohes Schaffen!

Unregistriert

Also ich habe jetzt General Motors Gewählt. Ist zwar etwas trocken,
aber ich kann mit vielen Bildern und Fakten "Protzen"

ich werde morgen mal den Text Posten zur Fehlerkorrektur (ist das hier erlaubt?), habe schon eine halbe Seite geschrieben.

mfg

tiorthan

Ja, Fehlerkorrekturen sind erlaubt.

Unregistriert

Also hier mal mein Text. Könnte besser sein, aber auch schlechter..... Ich muss noch etwas mehr schreiben, mal sehen was da noch dazu kommt.

General Motors is a American Company that produces Cars that will be shipped worldwide. General Motors was found on the 16th of September in 1908 by William C Durant. The first two Car Brands of GM were Buick and Oldsmobile. Both Brands are still at the American Market, but are not so popular in the European Country. One of the first big Deals of General Motors was, that they buyed lots of other Companies who Produced Cable Cars. They stopped the Production and started to made Buses. This is one of the reasons why there are not so much cable cars in the US today.
General Motors was 77 Years long the biggest Car Manufacturer in the World. But in 2008 they lost her first place to Toyota. Today, the Chef of General Motors is Daniel Akerson. The yearly amount is about 152 Billion Dollars (2011). There are 294.000 people who work at General Motors.
Today there are about 8 Car Brands who are made by General Motors. In the Lower price segment, Chevrolet is the only brand. In the mid Price Segment there are some national brands. In Germany it is Opel, in the USA and in China it is Buick and in great Britain it is Vauxhall Motors which is quite the same like Opel. In the Premium an d High Price Segment is only the Brand Cadillac which you can buy only in the US, but there are some stores who import the cars. And last but not least there are two special brands which are only for the us market. First there is GMC, a Brand who produces SUV´s, Pickups and Trucks. The second brand exists since 2005 and is namend after a famous car: the corvette.
General Motors ships their cars all around the world. But the most of all cars are shipped into the US and to China. Both of this countrys have over 34% of market share! In numbers this are over 4000 cars a year, which is more than VW, Audi and Mercedes Togehther.

Unregistriert

Kann mir bitte noch jemand helfen bei der Korrektur?

tiorthan

Zitat von Unregistriert

General Motors is an American Company that produces cars that are₁ shipped worldwide. General Motors was founded₂ by William C Durant on the 16th of September in 1908. The first two car brands of GM were Buick and Oldsmobile. Both brands are still on the American market, but are not as popular in Europe₃. One of the first big deals of General Motors was, that they bought lots of other Companies who produced cable cars. They stopped the production and started to make₄ buses. This is one of the reasons why there are not so many cable cars in the US today.
General Motors was the biggest car manufacturer in the world for 77 years, but in 2008 they lost their first place to Toyota. Today, the chairman₅ of General Motors is Daniel Akerson. The yearly revenue₆ is about 152 billion dollars (2011). There are 294.000 people who work at General Motors.
Today there are about 8 car brands that are made by General Motors. In the lower price segment Chevrolet is the only brand. In the mid-price segment there are some national brands. In Germany it is Opel, in the USA and in China it is Buick and in great Britain it is Vauxhall Motors which is quite the same as Opel. In the premium an d high-price segment there is only the brand Cadillac which you can buy only in the US, but there are some stores that import the cars. And last but not least there are two special brands which are only for the US market. First there is GMC, a brand that produces SUV´s, pickups and trucks. The second brand has existed since 2005 and is namend after a famous car: the Corvette.
General Motors ships their cars all around the world. But the most of the cars are shipped into the US and to China. Both countries have over 34% of market share!₇ In numbers this are over 4000 cars a year, which is more than VW, Audi and Mercedes together.

Dein Text sieht aus als ob du Zuckungen in den kleinen Fingern hast. Die Regeln der englischen Groß- und Kleinschreibung sind doch wirklich nicht so schwer. Man schreibt klein, außer es handelt sich um:
- Satz- oder Absatzanfänge
- Das Wort I
- Namen (jeder Art, in jedem Zusammenhang)
- Sogenannte "proper nouns". Das sind Substantive, die wie ein Name gebraucht werden. Im Zweifelsfall schreibt man aber lieber klein, da kann man weniger falsch machen.

1 - Es handelt sich um einen allgemeingültigen Fakt, den kann man nicht mit einem Futur-Modal ausdrücken.

2 - Das Verb "find" hat zwar die Vergangenheitsform "found", hier handelt es sich aber um das Verb "found" mit der Vergangenheitsform "founded".

3 - Alternativ, aber seltener benutzt: in the European countries

4 - Es gibt keine Situation in der englischen Sprache, in der eine Vergangenheitsform nach der Präposition to stehen kann.

5 - Das Wort "chef" bedeutet Koch und nichts anderes.

6 - Das Wort "amount" bedeutet Menge, das ergibt hier keinen Sinn.

7 - Marktanteil worin? Dieser Nachsatz ergibt nicht sehr viel Sinn für mich.

Unregistriert

Schonmal vielen Dank!

Ja, mit der Groß/Kleinschreibung habe ich schon immer Probleme. Sowohl im Deutschen als auch im Englischen *gg*

Hier mal mein Finaler Text. Hab noch einiges hinzugefügt und geändert.

English Presentation about General Motors (GM)
Hello Dear Class 9d! Today I want to hold an English Presentation about a Topic I´m interested in. My Presentation is about the US American Company General Motors.
GM is an American Company that produces cars that are shipped worldwide. General Motors was founded by William C. Durant on the 16th of September in 1908. The first two car brands of GM were Buick and Oldsmobile. Both brands are still on the American market, but are not as popular in Europe. But maybe one or two of you know them.
One of the first big deals of General Motors was, that they bought lots of other Companies who are produced cable cars. After that, they stopped the production of Cable Cars and started to make buses under the label GMC. This is one of the reasons why there are not so many cable cars in the US today. Most of the Buses that you can see in the US today are still from GMC. That was the early beginning of GM till the 1920 years.
GM was the biggest car manufacturer in the world for 77 Years, but in 2008 they lost teir first place to Toyota, but that was not so bad, because in 2011 they got their first Position back. Today, the chairman of General Motors is “Daniel Akerson”. The yearly revenue is about 152 billion dollars (2011), and there are over 294.000 people who work at for GM worldwide. That´s exactly the size of the population who lives in the German city “Münster”.
Today, in the year 2012, there are about 8 car brands that are made under the GM label. In the lower price segment, Chevrolet is the only brand. Of course, there are some national brands like Holden in Australia, but they are very small and have no importance in this Presentation. In the mid-price segment there are some national brands. In Germany it is Opel, in the USA and in China it is Buick and in great Britain it is Vauxhall Motors which is quite the same as Opel in Germany. In the premium and high-price segment there is only the brand Cadillac which you can buy only in the US, but there are some stores that import the cars to Germany and other Countries. And last but not least there are two special brands which are only for the US market. First there is GMC, a brand that produces SUV´s, Pickups and Trucks. They produced furthermore all the buses from the early beginnings of GM. The second brand has existed since 2005 and is named after a famous car that the most of you should know: the Corvette. Before that the Corvette was called “Chevrolet Corvette”.
GM ships their cars all around the world. But the most of the cars are shipped into the US and to China. Both countries have over 34% of market share in the sale figures of GM! In numbers this are over 4.000.000 cars a year, which is more than VW, Audi and Mercedes together.
But suddenly, this big and famous car manufacturer gets in troubles. In the year 2009 GM had to go into administration. There are many reasons for this abrupt case, but the biggest problem was, that GM had 27 billion debts. The US should take part of 60 percent of GM, that’s about 30 Billion Dollars, which is an unbelievable high number. The Canadians should take part of 12,5% and the rest should go to the people, wo supported the Company all the Time. But all this rescue plans doesn´t happen, because GM entered a winning about 8 Billion Dollars until the year 2012. With this money, GM was out of the troubles, that came in 2009.

tiorthan

Zitat von Unregistriert

Schonmal vielen Dank!

Ja, mit der Groß/Kleinschreibung habe ich schon immer Probleme. Sowohl im Deutschen als auch im Englischen *gg*

Hier mal mein Finaler Text. Hab noch einiges hinzugefügt und geändert.

English Presentation about General Motors (GM)
Hello Dear Class 9d! Today I want to give an English presentation about a Topic I´m interested in. My presentation is about the US American company General Motors.
GM is an American Company that produces cars that are shipped worldwide. General Motors was founded by William C. Durant on the 16th of September in 1908. The first two car brands of GM were Buick and Oldsmobile. Both brands are still on the American market, but are not as popular in Europe. But maybe one or two of you know them.
One of the first big deals of General Motors was, that they bought lots of other Companies that₁ produced cable cars. After that, they stopped the production of Cable Cars and started to make buses under the label GMC. This is one of the reasons why there are not many cable cars in the US today. Most of the buses that you can see in the US today are still from GMC. That were the early beginnings of GM until the 1920 years.
GM was the biggest car manufacturer in the world for 77 Years, but in 2008 they lost teir first place to Toyota, but that was not so bad, because in 2011 they got their first position back. Today, the chairman of General Motors is Daniel Akerson₂. The yearly revenue is about 152 billion dollars (2011), and there are over 294.000 people who work at₃ GM worldwide. That´s exactly the size of the population of the German city Münster₂.
Today, in the year 2012, there are about 8 car brands that are made under the GM label. In the lower price segment, Chevrolet is the only brand. Of course, there are some national brands like Holden in Australia, but they are very small and have no importance in this Presentation. In the mid-price segment there are some national brands. In Germany it is Opel, in the USA and in China it is Buick and in great Britain it is Vauxhall Motors which is quite the same as Opel in Germany. In the premium and high-price segment there is only the brand Cadillac which you can buy only in the US, but there are some stores that import the cars to Germany and other countries. And last but not least there are two special brands which are only for the US market. First there is GMC, a brand that produces SUVs₄, trucks₅. They also produced all the buses in the early beginnings of GM. The second brand has existed since 2005 and is named after a famous car that most₆ of you should know: the Corvette. Before that the Corvette was called Chevrolet Corvette₂.
GM ships their cars all around the world. But the most of the cars are shipped into the US and to China. Both countries hold over 34% of the sales share₇ of GM! In numbers that are over 4.000.000 cars a year, which is more than VW, Audi and Mercedes together.
But suddenly, this big and famous car manufacturer gets in trouble. In the year 2009, GM had to go into administration. There are many reasons for this abrupt case, but the biggest problem was, that GM had 27 billion in debts. The US should take part of 60 percent of GM, that’s about 30 Billion Dollars, which is an unbelievable high number. The Canadians should take part of 12,5% and the rest should go to the people, wo supported the Company all the Time. But all this rescue plans doesn´t happen, because GM entered a winning about 8 Billion Dollars until the year 2012. With this money, GM was out of the troubles, that came in 2009.₈

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1 - "Who" kann man bei Firmen nehmen, deshalb habe ich es in der ersten Korrektur gelassen, "that" ist hier aber besser. Korrigiert habe ich eigentlich das "are", das da zu viel war.

2 - Anführungszeichen haben eine besondere Bedeutung. Wenn ein Name in Anführungszeichen gesetzt wird, dann bedeutet dies, dass es sich bei dem Namen um einen Spitznamen oder ein Pseudonym handelt. Das ist hier nicht der Fall.

3 - At oder for beides geht hier.

4 - Niemals, wirklich niemals, wird in der englischen Sprache ein Plural mit einem Apostroph gebildet. Die Endung -'s wird ausschließlich für den Possessiv verwendet und als verkürzte Schreibweise von is (manchmal auch has).

5 - Es reicht aus hier von trucks zu sprechen, denn ein Pickup heißt auf englisch pickup truck.

6 - Solltest du jemals wieder die Wörter the und most direkt nacheinander stellen wollen, dann frag dich folgendes: Ist das nächste Wort ein Adjektiv oder steht "the most" für "das Äußerste"? Wenn du diese Frage nicht mit JA beantworten kannst, dann gehören diese beiden Wörter garantiert niemals zusammen.
Dort wo auf Deutsch "die meisten X" steht, schreibt man auf Englisch "most of the X". Dort wo auf Deutsch "die meisten von X" steht schreibt man auf Englisch "most of X" (ohne Artikel).

7 - Market share war das falsche Wort.

8 - Ich verstehe nicht ganz, was du damit aussagen willst. "Take part" und "entered a winning" ergibt keinen rechten Sinn.

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