Hauptschul Simulationsprüfung brauche DRINGEND HILFEEE beim korrigieren des textes!

Wir haben Montag in unserer Schule eine Hauptschul Simulationsprüfung. Das ist zwar keine echte Prüfung aber die zählt als eine mündliche Arbeit und läuft genau so wie bei einer echten Prüfung ab. Ich bräuchte nur dringend hilfe beim korrigieren meines Textes.

The Aborigines have a very long tradition. They have many holy places like hills and rivers and they believe, that nobody should touch the land. A holy place, for example is Ayer's rock, or like the Aborigines say Uluru. But since the arriving of the white settlers they couldn't save their land. But not only holy places are a very important part of their tradition. Most of the traditions are a part of the dreamtime. Dreamtime or dreaming is a word for their belief like the world was created. It describes how the land was formed and living things were created. Legends of the dreamtime are different from tribe to tribe. The dreamtime is very detailed and complicated. Chess is said to be a child's game in the comparison to the details and rules of the dreamtime. Every Aborigine has a special bird or animal totem and is not allowed to hunt or eat this. Many dances repeat the dreamtime and are part of the dreamtime themselves. Aborigines join the past to their life today in a dimension of life that does not seem to exist in the West Eeuropean's experience. A spirit never dies but is reincarnated with a new child.This connects each person strongly to his past and hiis environment. The tjuringas symbolise the dreaming for the Aborigines. Tjuringas are very special sacred stones and often represent the owner's totem animal or his spirit. Some tribes make wooden tjuringas which they also use as bullroarers. The name bullroarer comes from the noise they make when tied to a piece of string and swung in circles around the head. This noise was used to keep unwanted people away from sacred ceremonies and areas. But in less than 200 years their traditional way of life and culture have been almost completly destroyed. Sadly, most white settlers were interested neither in the Aborigines themselves nor their culture. Aborigines often come in conflict with state governments and the mining companies.

Danke im vorraus für die bemühungen.

Also ehrlich gesagt hatte ich den Tex von einer anderen Internetseite. (Das viel mir am einfachsten, weil ich unter zeit druck stand. (stehe) ) Jetzt aber denke ich schon, dass es besser wäre wenn ich den tex selber schreibe. Da der andere Text wie du schon sagst nicht ganz eindeutig ist. Und ich denke, dass ich deswegen schwierigkeiten beim auswendig lernen habe. Bei meinem neuem Text kann ich den Inhalt ja schon bisschen auswendig.

The Dreamtime
The Aborigines have a very long Tradition. Most of the tradition is a part from of the dreamtime. Dreamtime is a word for their belief. The Dreamtime is very complicated. Many dances repeat the dreamtime. Today I will presentation two legends from the dreamtime.

The first legend is about the rainbow snake.

Legend has it that the Rainbow Snake and his wife are the guardians of the rivers. The Rainbow Snake allows the blackfellas to catch fish when they are hungry, but if they spear them for fun, he becomes very angry. Rainbow Snake is a beautiful creature with long red and yellow stripes down his body. His wife is blue from top of her head to tip of her tail. After a shower of rain they sometimes stroll together and their bodies can be seen in the huge curve that stretches across the sky. It is then that the blackfella must be careful because Rainbow Snake can dart down like lightning to pick up anyone who has been foolish enough to catch fish for sport. As a just retribution he feeds them to the fish in the rivers.

The second legend is about ngalculli the red kangaroo.

Ngalculli the red kangaroo was coming down the north past Princess Charlotte Bay. At the same time all the men were out hunting kangaroo. One of the young men called Milkee speared Ngalculli who pulled out the spear and sniffed it. Ngalculli saw Milkee so he grabbed him and took him away. The other men looked for Milkee but couldn't find him. Milkee was finally put down to rest on a hill where they both turned to stone.

Und danke, dass du meinen vohrrigen Text versucht hast zu korrigieren und mich darauf aufmerksam gemacht hast, dass der Text nicht so gut ist.

hey, jetzt wo du es sagst (schreibst) fällt es mir auch auf. Hm... dann also so?

The Aborigines have a very long Tradition. Most of the tradition is a part from the dreamtime. It's a word for their belief and involves how the world was created. This is very complicated. Many dances from the aborigines repeat this. And today I will presentation two legends from the dreamtime.

Bin mir zwar bei dem Text auch nicht ganz sicher ob das gut klingt aber naja ich denke mal besser als der andere. Jetzt muss ich die Legenden nur noch bis morgen auswendig lernen.

Mit LG und einem yasmin

Woohooo....:-D Okey also dass muss ich jetzt und hier loswerden. Ich habe für meinen Vortrag eine 2+ bekommen. Als die Lehrerin fragte was ich mir selber geben würde sagte ich ne 3- oder 4+ aber war zum Glück doch nur ne 2+.

Das hätte ich ohne euch nicht geschafft !!!!!