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  • People Description

    Rose is the main role in the book. Her real name is Rosemarie Hatherway. She is 17 years old. She is the best friend of Lissa. Rose relationship with her mother is not as good. Frankly Rose hates her mother for she not there for them. Her mother is in fact a guardian. Also want to tell her mother who her father. Rose is a stubborn, stubborn person. She looks through the people and is a bright little head. It also keeps track of. She is very responsible. Perfectly designed for a guardian. But that was not always so. When Lissa and Rose were small they were right out of the sow. Every evening they were at another party. She broke the rules and had fun. But time she fled from the Academy with Lissa they changed. They made sure that it goes well Lissa. The book also comes from this sentence: "They come first." This sentence is the main intent of the Guard community.


    Dimitri is Rose's mentor. His real name is Dimitri Belikov and comes from Russia. A slight accent betrays him.
    Rose and Dimitri fall in love. But the two can and can not be together. Which both are and are guardians of Lissa. One day the two will protect Lissa from the Strigori. However, this is bad when they are in love with each other. Because if they were attacked, would accuse Rose and Dimitri from Lissa. Lissa is in fact the last of her family. It is also one Dragomir, one of the royal family and therefore take special importance. So imagine if Dimitri Rose throws instead of before it could really be bad Lissa.
    Dimitri takes his job very seriously. Among the guards, he is considered God. He is 24 years old and has already killed more Strigori monitor than many 40 year-old.
    Dimitri can rarely feelings. These feelings, he hides behind a Versade. He drops his emotions and rarely permits. Dimitri suppress their emotions just like Rose.

  • Ehrlichgesagt ist der Text ziemlich unverständlich. Zum einen, weil du nirgendwo erklärst was Guardians sind und zum anderen weil sehr viele Sätze einfach unvollständig sind oder mit den falschen Vokabeln ausgedrückt werden. Ich verstehe fast ein Drittel der Sätze nicht. So kann ich das nicht korrigieren, das müsstest du vorher noch einmal überarbeiten.

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