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  • Hallo zusammen!:) Würde mich freuen, wenn sich jemand meinem Text kurz annehmen würde!:)

    Language ist actually a living organism and it ever has been. There are different reasons to explain that fact.

    The world changes everyday. Research an Innovations are increasing and as a result are creating new things like products and services. In a consequence, you have to name that things and the development of a language goes on.

    A second reason is that the world is increasingly interconnected, which results in that fact, that languages are getting mixed. For example in Marketing it is just common to use English expressions for many circumstances.

    A third reason is that it is just normal for the youth to develop an own kind of language. Young people just want to seperate themselves from the adults.

    But in my opinion fixed grammar an spelling an rules of expression aren't obsolete an old-fashioned. Language rules are essential for communicating in daily life. Language is also something which you could be proud of and it identifies groups of people. As a result people should take care about their language and protect it.

  • Schon ganz okay. Fehlte noch etwas der Feinschliff. Ich habe den Inhalt aber nicht geändert.

    Language is a living organism and there are several reasons to explain this fact.

    The world changes everyday. Research and innovations are increasing and as a result new things are created like products and services. As a consequence, you need new names for these things and the development of a language goes on.

    Another reason is that the world is increasingly interconnected with the result that languages are getting mixed. For example in Marketing it is common to use English expressions for many circumstances.

    A third reason is that young people develop their own kind of language, because they want to seperate themselves from the adults.

    However it is my opinion that fixed grammar, spelling and rules of expression aren't obsolete or old-fashioned. Language rules are essential for communicating in daily life. Language is also something you can be proud of and it identifies groups of people. As a result people should take care about their language and protect it.

    Einmal editiert, zuletzt von Dags (20. Januar 2011 um 07:52)


  • Language is a living thing and there are several reasons to explain this fact.


    Es handelt sich um eine Aussage, die Allgemeingültigkeit beansprucht, deshalb ist hier das Simple Present gefordert. Sprache wird hier zwar als etwas Lebendes dargestellt, zu einem Organismus fehlt aber doch noch einiges.

    Zitat

    The world changes every day.


    everyday = alltäglich
    every day = jeden Tag

    Zitat

    Research and innovations are increasing and as a result new things like products and services are created.


    Wortstellung beachten. Die Formulierung "neue Dinge werden geschaffen wie Produkte und Dienstleistungen" wäre auf Deutsch schon zweifelhaft, auf Englisch wird sie missverständlich.

    Zitat

    Another reason is that the world is increasingly interconnected, with the result that languages get mixed.


    Das Komma ist wichtig, weil die Welt sonst mit dem Resultat verbunden wäre. Und es handelt sich wieder um eine Aussage, die allgemeingültigkeit beansprucht. Mit dem Continuous würde man unterstellen, dass dieser Vorgang jetzt gerade abläuft.

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  • Es gibt weder korrekte noch falsche Metaphern, denn man kann sie bilden wie man will. Ich habe nur meine Meinung zu dem vorliegenden Text gesagt, denn der schafft es gerade einmal so die Veränderlichkeit zu umreißen.

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