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    Hallo zusammen, hätte jemand Zeit und Lust meinen Englisch Text zu korrigieren? wäre um jede Unterstüzung froh.

    Alcohol is a ban. Is it correct? Many people have a big problem with drinking too much alcohol.
    What can we do for another opinion? Can we increase the older for legal alcohol consumption, or should we forbid drinking alcohol? Everyone will do her own experience they don’t listen of their parents or the government. The fact is young adults listen to their friends, because of that, it`s important that they have an intact social network.
    The reason, why drink peoples so much liquor? For a lot of teenagers is the life hart, stressful and full of uncertainly questions.

    Nich wahr, ich würde es so schreiben:

    Alcohol is a curse. Is this correct? Many people have a big problem with drinking too much alcohol.
    What can we do to change this opinion? Can we increase the minimum age for legal alcohol consumption, or should we forbid drinking alcohol? Everyone will collect own experiences if they don’t listen to their parents or the government. A fact is that young adults do what their friends say, and because of that, it`s important that they have an intact social network.
    The reason why people drink so much are spirits? For many teenagers life is hard, stressful and full of uncertain questions.

    I kid you not.

    Your text doesn't make much sense either. It's things like "Many people have a problem with ... What can we do to change this oppinion?" What the heck? What oppinion? There is no coherence in the text and that's why I find it incomprehensible.

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    Alcohol is a curse. Is this correct? Many people have a big problem with drinking too much alcohol.
    What can we do to change this opinion? Can we increase the minimum age for legal alcohol consumption, or should we forbid drinking alcohol? Everyone will collect own experiences if they don’t listen to their parents or the government. A fact is that young adults do what their friends say, and because of that, it`s important that they have an intact social network.
    The reason why people drink so much are spirits? For many teenagers life is hard, stressful and full of uncertain questions.

    I kid you not.