Lost in the USa ( Ich brauche hilfe bei der Gramatik und so)

  • Also ich habe einen Text geschrieben und ich würde den gerne korrigieren lassen:

    In the first chapter we can learn a little about Frank how old he is or other things.
    I heared that he is 13 years old. What we can learn too is that Frank isn't good in english he got a 6 in his english test.
    We get to know a few people in this chapter for example Frau Peter his teacher and his Aunt Trudy. We can hear some talks about Frank for example his parents talked about him because he is bad in english and that make his parents scared.
    So they chose that Frank could go to his Aunt Trudy. Frank's Aunt Trudy live in America New York City... that's a big problem for Frank because he can't talk good english and in America all talk english.
    And the next problem wait already Frank's Aunt Trudy want to talk only english.
    As Frank comes on at the New York City airport he was scared because all spoke english up until him self.
    But the lady form the airline helped Frank to found the bus. But Frank get the wrong bus he goes in a black van.
    It were the van of many bad people we can say it was gangsta. The van drove in a big garage on West 60th Street in Manhatten.
    There was the station of the gangsta. The fat black man opend the door of the van and saw Frank. The gangsta tried to talk with Frank but he understood all.
    The mans get all his valuables and Frank cant made anything.
    Frank saw a old man Frank went to him and told with the old man. The old man gives Frank a baseball cap and a dirty old jacket.
    Frank tried to ran away from the gangsta. The old man said NOT RUN! Walk!
    They won't know it's you. So he goes away and come to a hotel it was the “Plaza Hotel. Frank ran because he saw the gangsta and he was scared.
    As he ran in the hotel a man wanted to stop him but he can't stop him.
    Frank saw a police man he goes to im and said that he need help but now he saw that was not a police man but Smitty. He caught him.
    The gangsta drove to the garage and closed him in a empty room. After a while Frank slept. But as he woke up it was food and something to drink next to him. Later he told with the fad black man. Frank was thinking that the man are not really bad.

    Danke schonmal
    MFG Xet


  • PS: Falls jetzt jemand sich daran setzt bitte schreiben einmal :
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  • [quote='Xet','https://www.hausaufgaben-forum.net/forum/index.php?thread/&postID=14391#post14391']Also ich habe einen Text geschrieben und ich würde den gerne korrigieren lassen:

    In the first chapter we can learn a little bit about Frank how old he is or other things.
    I heared that he is 13 years old. What we can learn, too is that Frank isn't good in english he has got a F in his english test.
    We get to know a few people in this chapter for example Misses Peter ,his teacher and his Aunt Trudy. We can hear some talks about Frank for example his parents talked to him, because he is bad in english and that makes his parents scared.
    So they choose that Frank could go to his Aunt Trudy. Frank's Aunt Trudy lives in America, New York City... that's a big problem for Frank, because he can't talk english that good and in America everybody is talking english.
    But there is another problem is that Frank's Aunt Trudy only wants to talk english.
    As Frank arrives at the New York City airport he was scared, because everybody spoke english up until himself.
    But the lady form the airline helped Frank to find the bus. But Frank gets the wrong bus, he took a black van.
    It was the van of very bad people we could say it were gangster/nasty guys. The van drove in a big garage on West 60th Street in Manhattan.
    That was the station of the gangsta. The fat black man opend the door of the van and saw Frank. The gangsta tried to talk with Frank ,but he understood nothing at all.
    The men get all his valuables and Frank couldn´t made anything.
    Frank saw a old man .Frank went to him and talked to the old man. The old man gave Frank a baseball cap and a dirty old jacket.
    Frank tried to ran away from the gangsta. The old man said DON´T RUN! Walk!
    They will know that it's you. So he went away and got to a hotel. It was the “Plaza Hotel. Frank ran because he saw the gangsta and he was scared.
    As he ran in the hotel a man wanted to stop him but he can't stop him.
    Frank saw a police man. He ran to him and said that he need help but now he saw that was not a police man but Smitty. He caught him.
    The gangsta drove to the garage and closed him in a empty room. After a while Frank fell asleep. But as he woke up it was food and something to drink next to him. Later he talked to the fat black man. Frank was thinking that the men are not really bad.

    So ........Ichs habs.. Glaub ich :p

  • Nee ich hab aufgegeben. Das ist meiner Meinung nach "fucked up beyond all repair" und muss neu geschrieben werden.

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  • [quote='Xet','https://www.hausaufgaben-forum.net/forum/index.php?thread/&postID=14391#post14391']Also ich habe einen Text geschrieben und ich würde den gerne korrigieren lassen:

    In the first chapter we can learn a little about Frank how old he is or other things.
    I heared that he is 13 years old. What we can learn too is that Frank isn't good in english he got a 6 in his english test.
    We get to know a few people in this chapter for example Frau Peter his teacher and his Aunt Trudy. We can hear some talks about Frank for example his parents talked about him because he is bad in english and that make his parents scared.
    So they chose that Frank could go to his Aunt Trudy. Frank's Aunt Trudy live in America New York City... that's a big problem for Frank because he can't talk good english and in America all talk english.
    And the next problem wait already Frank's Aunt Trudy want to talk only english.
    As Frank comes on at the New York City airport he was scared because all spoke english up until him self.
    But the lady form the airline helped Frank to found the bus. But Frank get the wrong bus he goes in a black van.
    It were the van of many bad people we can say it was gangsta. The van drove in a big garage on West 60th Street in Manhatten.
    There was the station of the gangsta. The fat black man opend the door of the van and saw Frank. The gangsta tried to talk with Frank but he understood all.
    The mans get all his valuables and Frank cant made anything.
    Frank saw a old man Frank went to him and told with the old man. The old man gives Frank a baseball cap and a dirty old jacket.
    Frank tried to ran away from the gangsta. The old man said NOT RUN! Walk!
    They won't know it's you. So he goes away and come to a hotel it was the “Plaza Hotel. Frank ran because he saw the gangsta and he was scared.
    As he ran in the hotel a man wanted to stop him but he can't stop him.
    Frank saw a police man he goes to im and said that he need help but now he saw that was not a police man but Smitty. He caught him.
    The gangsta drove to the garage and closed him in a empty room. After a while Frank slept. But as he woke up it was food and something to drink next to him. Later he told with the fad black man. Frank was thinking that the man are not really bad.

    Ich selbst habe das buch gelesen . Ich weiss nicht aber iich finde du hast eins direkt zu schnell nach dem anderem gemacht sry :` ich schreibe morgen selber eine arbeit darüber :)

  • Kann jemand eine Summary über das Buch "Lots in the USA" schreiben.Aber für das erste Kapitel!