hab ich das Richtig gemacht?

  • Hi morgen muss ich einen Artikel über eine "demonstration" schreiben es geht um meine note stehe auf 3,5 :( es wär wirklich sehr nett wen ihr mir helfen könntet.

    Yesterday was lagre a protest movement in the Bollin Valley evacuated by the police. The evacuation was well planned by the police. The planned protest was directed against a 2 runway at Manchester Airport had.

    Yesterday was lagre a protest movement in the Bollin Valley evacuated by the police. The evacuation was well planned by the police. The planned protest was directed against a 2 runway at Manchester Airport had.

    , At 3:45 in the morning the police started the camp in the Bollin Valley to evacuate. The demonstrators were prepared just like the police. The demonstrators crouched in the arrival of the police in their tree houses and caves around the forest. High in the trees they had built tree houses were all connected with each other. The police ran a tree house after another until only a few empty spaces left were the demonstrators were arrested by the police back on the ground. The aim of this protest was to prevent the building of a second runway at Manchester Airport. The demonstrators wanted to prevent the destruction of some so old trees. The protesters were among dabesein after the evacuation of many TV cameras removed. The opinion of residents about the protest is divided. A woman shouted: Thanks for trying to save the valley. in turn, call another man to thank: for nothing is back home.

  • Hi morgen muss ich einen Artikel über eine "demonstration" schreiben es geht um meine note stehe auf 3,5 :( es wär wirklich sehr nett wen ihr mir helfen könntet.


    Yesterday there was a large protest movement in the Bollin Valley which had been evacuated by the police. The evacuation was well planned by the police. The planned protest was directed against a second runway of Manchester Airport had.

    , At 3:45 in the morning the police started evacuating the camp in the Bollin Valley to evacuate. The demonstrators were prepared just like the police. When the police arrived,The demonstrators crouched in their tree houses and caves around the forest. High in the trees they had built tree houses which were all connected with each other. The police stormed one tree house after another until only a few empty spaces were left where the demonstrators were arrested by the police back on the ground. The aim of this protest was to prevent the building of a second runway at Manchester Airport. The demonstrators wanted to prevent the destruction of some very old trees. The protesters were present after the evacuation of many TV cameras removed. (1)The opinion of residents about the protest is divided. A woman shouted: Thanks for trying to save the valley. in turn, call another man to thank: for nothing is back home.(1)

    1) beim besten Willen: unverständlicher Satz


    Ich hab's versucht, aber es ging nicht immer:

    fett = korrigiert bzw. eingefügt; rot = gestrichen

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