Bitte um Korrektur -Britain

  • Hallo Leute,
    ich hab fragen beantwortet (auf engl).Ich wollte nur das sie auf G,Satzbau,T, verbessert wird,ich habe auch eine Schwäche Argument klar und deutlich zu beschreiben. . Danke im voraus.
    British Empire- a Source of Pride

    1.How does Lawrence James see the British Empire and how do critics of British imperialism see it?

    L-J. have full confident about B.E. He compliements the BE. for what they did all over the world in reference to their colonies in Africa,Asia,Nordamreica and so on.He said that the B.soldiers invand the countries to stop unhuman traditionon human like to sacrifice them.Not the people in that contry lost somethink he mentionen the enormous soldiers who were tough enough to stay their in different weather condition,who rather died there like Lord Lugard or Duke of Wellington , but they did not forget the values and norm and they didn't to anything againt this rules,they retained that.B.E. just stay there to help the people in their colony to create a self-government,indepent from them:that was there plan from the very first.

    The oppoite side have seeb the B.E as a regime which destroy so many countries, in reference of their culture,And Nowadays problems have his seed in the time of the B_E.Many colony are now demanding a compensantion from the British .

    2.The writer describes the characteristics of members of the colonial service. Make a list of all the characteristics metioned in the text ans sad how credible you find james's view.

    A young man named Duke Wellingtonhe is mentioned in the text as a man who stands for good values and present peace and harmony, he said that he will sacrifice a invanted area in INDIA then to give it his beliefs off.
    An other young man ,named Lord Lugard ,positioned in Afrika suffered a tropical fever, as he wonded by poisoned arrow.At least he sample the foundation of Uganda,nigeria , and his wish for what that the people shall live in peace that was their main job that's why they were fighting for.

    3.What reasons for the dissolution of the Empire are mentioned in the text?

    They said that the B.E. have detroyed themselves.There plan was that their colonies shall at least govern themselves.So their plan contaied a self-destroyes point.The British awaited that the people kick them out of the country.Todaythis countriey also know as Commonwealth.

    4.What is your own personal reaction to James's view of the British Empire?

    I think that J. overact to much.The history show us how much blood shedded (vergoßen)and not just in one country.It's true The B.E. have clarified many folks to give their unhuman tradition up or have built many essentials bulding like schools and hospital in favour of the people. But they shameless capitalized their unskilled not at all they als capitalized the minral resources.In India they exploit the caste system they don't do sth against it.They appreciate this thought,during the B.E. it was profit for them to have eople under them who not worth like them

  • Hi azadi,
    ich möchte dir gern helfen, aber ich sehe mich dazu außer Stande.
    Ich blicke inzwischen auf über 30 Jahre Erfahrung im Umgang mit Textkorrekturen zurück - ab er es gibt Grenzen!
    Ich möchte dies an deinem ersten Satz demonstrieren:

    Ich gehe davon aus, dass du dir die folg. Formulierung auf Deutsch zurechtgelegt hast

    L.J. hat volles Vertrauen auf das B.E. Er beglückwünscht das BE dafür, was es getan hat überall in der Welt in bezug auf seine Kolonien in ...

    du hast diesen Text wortwörtlich übersetzt; dabei hast du wohl immer den ersten Eintrag eines Wörterbuches genommen, egal ob es Nomen oder Verb oder sonstiges war.

    DEin Text ist damit absolut un-Englisch und nicht korrigierbar;

    die Korrektur käme einer Neu-schrift gleich.

    Vorschlag: Falls du noch zur Schule gehst und solche Aufgaben bearbeiten musst, hast du mindestens 6 Jahre Englisch hinter dir. Verlasse dich auf diese Lernzeit und dein in ds Zeit erwaorbenes Können! Es ist größer aös du denkst!! - ich konnte mich nach 6 Jahren Engl. - und 1 Woche Eingewöhnung - fließend mit meinen amerikanischen Gasteltern unterhalten - ! Wirf das Wörterbuch in die Ecke und schreibe so, wie du es kannst. Es geht!!


    Flo