Kann jmd. meinen summary korrigieren?

In the article"This Potter Defender Is An Online Campaign wizard" tells about a girl, who is against the censorship of Harry Potter.

The Harry Potter series are at the top of the best-seller lists but in 19 states people are working to ban the Potter books.They say that the books are offer a dangerous view of witchcraft.
Linda harvey is for the censorship and she says that the Potter series has a pro-pagan ethic.
Jula Mayersohm is a young Potterfan and she is against the censorship.Once Julia sees an article about Harry Potter on the Internet title"Harry Potter takes Drugs" written by Family-Friendly-Libraries.
The article angered her enough and so nshe starts a campaign against this false article.
She visits two dozen Harry Potter message boards and asks others to protest against this false article And really at least hundreds of people have helped her and the article was taken off the website.
Mayersohn is a guest of honor at the "Banned Books Week" and she receives $100 and an olympic-style goldmedal.

maggyx

Also ich habe keine Fehler gefunden

Flo

Also ich habe keine Fehler gefunden laola

Heißt das -im Umkehrschluss - dass alles richtig ist?
Dann wollen wir doch mal sehen:

In the article"This Potter Defender Is An Online Campaign wizard" tells about a girl, who is against the censorship of the Harry Potter books..

The Harry Potter series are have been at theon top of the best-seller lists for a long time, but in 19 states (1)people are working(2) to ban the Potter books.They say that the books are offer a dangerous view of witchcraft.
Linda Harvey is for is in favour of the censorship and she says that the Potter series has displays/propagates a pro-pagan ethic.
Jula Mayersohm, young Potterfan, and she is against the censorship.Once Julia sees has read an article about Harry Potter on the Internet with the title "Harry Potter takes Drugs" written by Family-Friendly-Libraries.
The This article has angered her enough and so she has started starts a campaign against this false article.
She has visited two dozen Harry Potter message boards and has asked asks others to protest against this false article And really at least (3)hundreds of people have helped her and the article was has been taken off the website.
Mayersohn is has been a guest of honour at the "Banned Books Week" and she has received receives $100 and an Olympic-style goldmedal.

1) meinst du "states" = Bundesstaaten der USA oder "countries" = Länder;du müsstest sonst "states of the USA" ergänzen.
2) keine progressive form in einer summary!
3) "at least" verlangt eine konkrete Zahl da passt "mehrere Hunderte" nicht.

meine Korrekturzeichen:
fett = korrigiert b zw. eingefügt // rot == gestrichen kursiv = Achtung

Flo

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