Englisch Aufsatz

  • Hallo, ich würde mich freuen, wenn sich jemand das nach Fehlern ansehen könnte, wäre super, vielen Dank.


    In my text I want to write about the topic "I cannot live without my mobile phone" and I want to show the advantages and disadvantages of technical devices in my day life.
    First let me say that technical devices are really important for me.
    I need them for information and they facilitate my everyday life.
    My computer is a technical tool for me.
    It helps me with my homework and replaces my books.
    He quickly answered me all questions.
    I use the PC only sometimes for games, because I know that PC games can be addictive, depressed and aggressive.
    If I'm too long on the PC, I neglect my friends.
    The mobile phone is very important for me.
    With the mobile phone I can get medical help quickly.
    I also need my smart phone because I can always stay in contact with my family or my friends.
    Dangerous is the radiation from your smart phones, this is not good for us.
    The privacy and data protection are disclosed with this technique.
    Via Whatsapp I can exchange with friends.
    When I'm sick, I get told what I missed at school.
    My hobby is photography. With my new camera, I can make a lot of pictures in succession and record videos in high quality.
    Also, I love to listen loud music with my MP3 player.
    The headphones can damage the ear and lead to hearing loss.
    On the one hand I am happy that I can go to school by car or bus.
    But on the other hand pollute the exhaust gases the air.
    I love to cook, so my kitchen appliances are very important.
    Also, the vacuum cleaner is important for me. It facilitates my work.
    I am glad that there are technical devices that make the water warm and heating my room.
    I like to watch movies on the TV.
    It is better if I could read in the time or do sport.
    I do not want to do without technical devices.