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Haruni

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Würde mich freuen wenn sich jmd die Zeit nehmen würde und mein essay korrigiert. Würde mich über jeden Tipp freuen wie ich des besser schreiben bzw formulieren könnte. Falls mir jmd auch ein Tipp geben könnte wie ich die Sätze sinnvoll verknüpfe dann wäre es suppa.
Danke im vorraus.

Everything went wrong

It was Saturday morning. Jenny got up at 7.a.m. Jenny woke up so early because on that day she had her driving test. It is at 10 am. She went to the bathroom brushed her teeth and had a shower. Afterwards she had breakfast. She ate a chicken sandwhich with a cup of orange juice while she was watching TV. She was very excited because it was her first driving test. After the breakfast she got out of the house. It was a.m. Jenny hurried on to the station but she knew that the train would arrive in 20minutes.she just wanted to be safe that she didnt come late. When she came to the station there was nobody. Usually there were roughly more than 100 people but Jenny didnt perceive it because she was distracted by her smart phone. After couple of minutes she noticed it. So, she turned on the VVS app on her mobile which has informations about the schedule. Jenny read that there was a rail strike today. In addition the trains would arrive ever secound hour. So she called a taxi. The taxi arrived in less than 2 minutes and picked Jenny up from the station. Jenny was delighted . It was 9:30 a.m. She was a little bit afraid beause it was possible that she came lateand so she would not pass the test. Suddenly there was another problem. They stuck in a traffic. Jenny paid her bill and got out of the car. The last metres she had to run. After 10 minutes she reaached the driving school timely. Finallyy she noticed that se had her schedule next week and not today. She was mislead by herself. She got upset because she wasted her whole mornig. Usually she would sleep now in her cuddly bed. Neverthless she met her best friend in the town and they went together to the cinema to watch a film. Clearly it was not a really bad day.

Fluffy

It was Saturday morning and Jenny got up at 7.a.m. She woke up so early because on that day she had her driving test [B]which was supposed to be[/B at 10 am. She went to the bathroom brushed her teeth and had a shower and afterwards she had breakfast. While watching TV she ate a chicken sandwhich with a cup of orange juice. She was very excited because it was her first driving test. After the breakfast she got out of the house. It was Uhrzeit fehlt!!!a.m. Though she knew that the train would arrive in 20minutes, Jenny hurried on to the station because she just wanted to be safe that she wouldn't come late. Usually there were roughly more than 100 people but Jenny didnt perceive it because she was distracted by her smart phone. After couple of minutes she noticed that there was nobody. So, she turned on the VVS app on her mobile which has informations about the schedule. Jenny read that for one thing there was a rail strike today and for another thing the trains would arrive only every second hour. So she called a taxi which arrived in less than 2 minutes and picked her up at the station. Jenny was delighted. It was 9:30 a.m. but Jenny was still a little bit afraid beause she might came late after all and so she could not pass the test. Suddenly there was another problem, they stuck in a traffic. Jenny paid her bill and left the car. The last metres she had to run. After 10 minutes she reached the driving school just in time, but then - looking into her schedule - she noticed that her appointment with the driving school for the test would be next week and not today. She has made a mistake in the date and got upset because she wasted her whole morning. Usually she would sleep now in her cuddly bed. Neverthless she met her best friend in town and they went together to the cinema to watch a film/movie. So, nevertheless, it was undoubtedly no bad day.

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