Essay Korrektur

  • Hallo,
    ich sollte auf Englisch ein Essay schreiben pro/contra Fernsehen.
    Doch bin nicht so gut in Englisch.
    Könnte jemand da mal drüber schauen und mir Tipps geben was ich verbessern kann.
    Grammatik ist nicht meine Stärke.

    Pro and Con for watch TV
    TV is inherent part in a normal household. Most familys watching TV at the evening.
    Many people think TV watching is unhealthy .nevertheless is the TV the most popular medium world wide.The first moon-landing has the most viewers on the TV.This essay aims to show the pro and con arguments .

    The home life is endangered because the family less communicated. Important conversations take shorter.
    TV watching is unhealthy because the users move less and eating more.
    The recreation is passive not active.
    Some news shows are very manipulative.
    The massive violence in some blockbuster is for children not good.

    The informations scope is diverts and better.
    Documentations are better illustrative for the user the learning effect is better than a book.
    Live views are possible the user is middle of the action.
    TV watching is relaxation for everyday life.

    In summary we can say tv watching is in case of improper consumption risky.
    The negative arguments for watch TV is entitled. The threat to long sit for the TV and children look violence movies.The parents must monitor what the children watches on the TV.
    Alternative to television is over web stream (Netflix) watch videos and series this had a better monitor function for children. The last problem is the motion shortage, per day to view two hours TV every day. Makes before watch TV sport or go walk.

    I`m of the opinion that the usefulness or the harmfulness depends on the behavior of individuals.
    the responsibility for healthy tv watch lies with the parents or in a self.

    MFG
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