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  • Hallo,ich heiße Marvin und wollte wissen ob diese 2 kurzen Englisch Texte und 6 Sätze richtig geschrieben sind da ich mich im freien Schreiben in Englisch nicht sicher fühle.Bin nicht so gut in Englisch Ich wäre sehr dankbar dafür deswegen schonmal DANKE IM VORRAUS.

    I have recently watched an action film. It was a very good film I have seen. It was called “ The Departed ”. The story was very interesting, and all the time I was thinking “ What will happen next?”
    The story was telling about the mafia of Frank Castello his son Colin Sullivan makes a police studies by the Massachusetts State Police. Collin Sullivan recruited for the police special unit .Collin shall for his dad information collect over his mafia activity.Billy Costigan has are a police studies by the Massachusetts State Police he was recruited for the undercover unit.Billy discharged to the Frank Castello mafia and comes on the trail to Collin.The action film is very savage and the ending from the film is insane.
    I really recommend you to see this film. The acting was so good that you forget it isn’t the real world. You will be amazed by the wonderful acting of the stars, I am sure.

    I had bought a new smart phone on the internet. My old smart phone was broke from my sister. My new smart phone is very good has a good camera has six megapixel and the connection to the internet is so good. The smartphone has 32 gigabyte memory and expandable with a SD card to 64 gigabytes. The smart phone is amazing even in the forest has a good phone connection.With the new smart phone can you listen music and watching videos.For the camping is in the smart phone a compass.The price for the smart phone is very cheap in contrast to the competition.

    1.We have the best custom support in Europe.
    2.The guests in our hotel are welcome.
    3.Your outfit are horrible.
    4.The bridge is obvious broke.
    5.This is a very rotten smell.
    6.The mouse is in the house.

  • Hallo Marvin, ich schau mal schnell drüber :D

    1. Text
    The story was very interesting, and I was thinking all the time "What will happen next?" (<- sb vertauscht)
    The story told (einfach simple past) about the mafia of Frank Castello.
    Collin shall collect information over his mafia activity for his dad. (<- Erneut sb)
    Der nächste Satz mit "Billy Costigan" ist leider so falsch, dass ich den Sinn nicht verstehe, das müsstest du mir auf deutsch antworten, was das heißen soll :D
    Billy discharged to the Frank Castello mafia und came (simple past) on the trail to Collin.
    The actionfilm is very savage and the end of it is insane (hört sich besser an)
    The acting was so good that you forget that it isn't the real world (<- that, dass es nicht die echte Welt ist...)

    2. Text
    I bought a new smartphone on the internet.
    My old smartphone has been broken by my sister.
    My new smartphone is very good and has a good camera which has six megapixel.
    Morever, the connection to the internet is very well. (Versuche mal nicht immer 'good' zu benutzen)
    The smartphone has 32 gigabyite memory and is expandable with a SD card to 64 gigabytes.
    Even in the forest, the mobilephone has a good phone connection. (Würde auch nicht immer smartphone schreiben)
    With the new mobilephone, you can listen to music and watch videos (Sb).
    For the camping, there's a compass in it.

    Zu den Sätzen:
    Your outfit(s) is/are horrible -> Abhängig von Einzahl/Mehrzahl

    Gruß Lisa ;)

  • Vielen Dank für die Antwort :), also ich wollte Schreiben das Billy Costigan auch bei der Polizei eine Ausbildung gemacht hat und dann Undercover eingesetzt worden ist , um dann gegen die Mafia beweise zu Sammeln.

    Mit freundlichen Grüßen

  • Achsoo, okay, das könntest du dann denke ich so formulieren:
    Billy Costigan did a development at the Massachussetts State police where he was recruited for the undercover unit. :)