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  • Hier ist der Text (tut mir Leid, hatte wirklich keine Lust alles abzutippen xD):
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    Und hier meine Summary:

    The extract from the book „Where Am I Wearing?“ written by Kelsey Timmerman in 2009 deals with workers in cambodia and their wage.

    Timmermann travels around the world, to find out where and how our clothes are made. In Cambodia Timmerman meets Nari and other girls to talk with them about their jobs. After lunch he starts with his questions. The girls had to move out and leave their family to find work, but they always give them the half or a quarter of their wage. According to Timmermans question, what they think about that people don’t want to buy the cloths because the workers aren’t paid fair. The combodian girls are unhappy, when they don’t buy the cloths, because than they wouldn’t have a job.
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    Meine Lehrerin meinte, es soll nur das ALLER WICHTIGSTE dabei sein und ca. 5-6 Sätze. Ich danke euch im voraus . Bitte nicht nur Rechtschreib- und Grammatikfehler korregieren, sondern auch vielleicht Tipp's wie mans besser sagen könnte oder welcher wichtiger Punkt vielleicht noch fehlt

  • Hier die Korrektur:

    The extract from the book "Where Am I Wearing?" written by Kelsey Timmerman in 2009 deals with workers in Cambodia and their wages.

    Timmermann travels around the world in order to find out where and how our clothes are made. In Cambodia Timmerman meets Nari and some other girls, with whom he talks about their jobs. The girls tell him that they had leave their families to find work and that they send a quarter of their wages to them. Timmerman furthermore asks them what they think about people, who don’t want to buy clothes from Cambodia because the workers aren’t paid fairly. The Cambodian girls answer that they are unhappy about the fact that some people don’t buy their clothes for that reason for* this might endanger their jobs.

    * for bedeutet hier weil

  • Korrektur der Korrektur:
    The extract from the book "Where Am I Wearing?" written by Kelsey Timmerman in 2009 deals with workers in Cambodia and their wages.

    Timmermann travels around the world in order to find out where and how our clothes are made. In Cambodia Timmerman meets Nari and some other girls, with whom he talks about their jobs. The girls tell him that they had entweder had left, oder had to leave their families to find work and that they send part of their wages home. On the question what they think about people who don't buy jeans from Cambodia because the workers aren’t paid fairly, the Cambodian girls answer that such reactions would endanger her jobs.