Korrektur zu "Describing People" bitte

    Guten Tag!

    Ich schreibe in wenigen Tagen eine wichtige Englisch-Klausur. Da ich mir beim Verfassen von Texten zum Thema "Describing People" nicht sehr sicher bin, möchte ich jemanden bitten, sich folgenden Text durchzulesen und u. U. einige Verbesserungen vorzuschlagen.

    Ich beschreibe im nachfolgenden Text Papst Franziskus I.

    Like each Pope Franziskus does not look very young, I guess he is older than 70. He has a good figure, he is not fat, but also he does not look very muscular or athletic. I have never met him before, so I don't know how big he is, but based on some pictures and TV shows I guess he has average height. His hair is balding, there is not very much of it any more and because of his age it's white. Whenever you watch him in public, he wears a small white jewish cap, which covers only a very small part of his head, it does not cover a few moles on his head beside his hair. Because he comes from Argentina, his skin is sunburned. He doesn't have any freckles or dimples and for his age he has very less wrinkles, he does not look as old as he actually is. He does not have a beard or a moustache or anything "special". Mostly he wears completely white clothes and a cross around his neck. So far I think he is a very nice and polite person, who really wants to change something in the Catholic Church.

    Vielleicht weiß jemand auch noch allgemeine Tipps, wie man eine Personenbeschreibung etwas besser gestalten könnte.

    Vielen Dank im Voraus,
    sonstwer

    Just like all the Popes, Franziskus does not look very young. I guess he is older than 70. He has a good body, he is not fat, but he also does not look very muscular or athletic. I have never met him before, so I don't know how tall he is, but based on some pictures and TV shows I guess he has average height. His hair is balding, there is not very much left of it anymore and it's white because of his age. Whenever you watch him in public, he wears a small white Jewish (ein jüdischer Papst?) cap, which covers only a very small part of his head, it does not cover a few moles (Maulwürfe!?) on his head next to his hair. His skin is tanned, because he comes from Argentina. He doesn't have any freckles or dimples and he has just a few wrinkles, which is not quite matching his age in my opinion. He does not look as old as he probably is (du meinst am Anfang, du wüsstest gar nicht wie alt er genau ist, und dass er nicht sehr jung aussieht). He does not have a beard or a mustache or anything extraordinary. He wears completely white clothes and a cross around his neck most of the time. I think he is probably a very nice and polite person, who really wants to change something in the Catholic Church.

    So kannst du das stehen lassen. Es lässt sich natürlich noch vieles am Ausdruck machen, aber die größten Fehler hab ich für dich schon mal korrigiert.